ACTIVITY:
Now that you know how to write an application letter I'd like you to analyse this example. Write in a comment why you think this is a good or bad application letter. Justify your answers.
EXAMPLE
I would refer you to your advertisement in this weeks daily sun which calls for sales manager.
I am 24 years of age and would be most grateful if you would consider me for this position.
I was educated at Enugu State University of Science and technology, EnuguState and I am at present employed by a company in the metal industry, I have had experience of plastic materials though only from the office sales side.
I thrust that this application is of your interest and I await your reply.
Yours faithfully .
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ReplyDeleteHello everyone!Well, I think the whole information that its given is important like studies, personal features, experience in other works but I would change the introduccion, when it says that she is applying for the job. Apart from that, from my point of view the application letter is a good one. ;)
ReplyDeleteHi everybody! I think this letter is kind of informal and it doesn't have all the characteristics of an Application letter. For example, there is not an introduction such as phone number,address, name etc...
ReplyDeleteHi friends! As regard the Application letter, I believe that it isn't a good letter because it doesn't follow the correct structure, we can see it at the end of it because the person who is applying for the job doesn't write a direction or telephone where the employer can contact him.
ReplyDeletehi!!!!!! Well, for me this application letter have important information, but, it hasn't got a telephone number, or an adress, what is more, It hsn't got a good introduction, is informal, and he doesn't seem very interesting in the job...
ReplyDeleteHello...! the first thing that i noticed in this application letter is that it doesn't have a good introduction,for example the name or the position of the employer. Secondly, it doesn't have the information of the person who is sending the application letter and it is really important that the employer has our data so he can contact us.On the other hand, it includes a good description of the characteristics of the person in order to make it attractive.
ReplyDeleteHello!!!
ReplyDeleteShe/He doesn't give personal information for example She/He didn't write her/his name
i can see
No dates
No names of the receptors
No salutation
No details of how to contact her/him
No sign of the person
So she/he won't be hired by the ones who put the advertisment
If She/He doesn't correct her/his mistakes she/he will never be hired by anyone in the world!!! :D
Hello! well for me this application letter gives neccesary information but its structure is informal and I think that is more convenient a formal structure for this type of letter. Also it has't got address, names of receptor and sign of the writer.
ReplyDeletehi! really this structure of this application letter is informal, and I agree with us because not mention or give name, dates, telephone number, address, etc!
ReplyDeletesee you friends!! =)
Miss Yesica, I tried to publish my comment many times but I can`t see it.
ReplyDeleteOk I think that the problem with this letter is that all the information about the person to which it is addressed and the person who is lookink for the job is not being included in the text, apart from that you can see that it is too informal.
Hi! ^^ I can see the same mistakes that charly said,
ReplyDeletethere is no personal information, any dates, there is no name of the receptors, she/he doesn't put telephone numbers to contact with that person, there is no sign.
This application letter is too informal!